Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try nd improve such situations Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.
According to
many people
, individuals accept a bad situation
and they choose an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. But others think that it will be better to try to develop themselves rather than to choose a bad situation
. I completely would not think that it is justified for accepting
a bad Change preposition
to accept
situation
and I believe that everybody can be changed
Wrong verb form
change
this
situation
if work
hard. It will be outlined these viewpoints before concluding this
essay.
To begin
with, people
who choose a bad event for their lives will be unhappy for a big part of their lives. For instance
, some citizens work
both unhappy jobs and also
moneyless jobs. If we think that they spend a lot of time in their job, they throw their life into landfill as well as
this
situation
impact
their families. The citizens should try to change these bothering issues. Correct subject-verb agreement
impacts
Thus
, they can shape their lives however
they want.
On the other hand
, although
some people
prefer to accept what they have in their hands, people
who want to change this
situation
can be successful. They should just work
hard. for
example, Jeff Bezos has begun to improve his profession only in a small portion of the garage. Capitalize word
For
While
he gets
hard to develop Amazon at the beginning of improving his Verb problem
finds it
work
, he never gives up because of belief. And nowadays it's on the first riches list.
To sum up
, our choices specify our life how
will be and push us. As we make our choices always have to choose the hard one.Correct word choice
and how
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task response
Provide a clearer and more detailed comparison of the two viewpoints. Explain the reasons and implications of accepting a bad situation versus trying to improve it.
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