Many schools these days have problems with poor student behavior. Why do you think these problems occur? What could be done tackle these problems?

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Many schools these days have problems with poor student behavior. Why do you think these problems occur? What could be done tackle these problems?

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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

You and your family are moving to another country for work, and you are looking to buy a house there. Write a letter to a property agent

Some people think that success is the best indicator for intelligence, while others think that intelligence can be measured in other ways. What is your opinion?