Although more and more people get the news on social media, newspapers will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. Do you agree or disagree?

The diagram illustrates the process of producing products for the furniture industry from steel rods. Overall, the given process consists of 11 levels, beginning with the raw materials and ending up with the inspection.
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the temperature of about 1300-1500 degrees and refined in a smelting cabin.
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cooling
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reservoir. After
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it goes through a reservoir and the temperature of the metal has a decline. After
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by rollers and it is put in the heating machine.
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it gets an ID stamp and goes through the inspection stage. After all these stages material is ready to be used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Credibility
  • Journalistic standards
  • Dissemination
  • Fake news
  • Demographics
  • Digital news consumption
  • Interactivity
  • Engagement
  • Public opinion
  • Adaptation
  • Regulatory
  • Revenue
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