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Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones in communication has negative effects on young people's reading and writing skill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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As shown in the above two pictures, it is obvious that the ring
road
 around the hospital basically remained unchanged from 2007 to 2010.
However
, the transportation infrastructure has been greatly upgraded. The most significant changes are the addition of two roundabouts and the expansion of bus facilities and parking lots. As for the ring
road
, compared with 2007, the only change in 2010 is the construction of a new roundabout in the
center
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centre
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 of the south section, removing the original T-junction with
hospital
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the hospital
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road
. At the other end of the same
road
, another roundabout is built at the intersection with the urban
road
. In 2007, there were six bus stops on the hospital
road
. By 2010, these stations had disappeared and
replaced
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 by a bus stop west of Hospital
Road
, which can lead to the above two roundabouts. In 2007, there was only one parking
lot
, which extended to the full length of the east side of Hospital
Road
, and there was only one entrance in the southeast of the ring
road
. By 2010, the parking
lot
 has been transformed into a parking
lot
 for employees only, and another parking
lot
 for the public only has been built on the right side of the east section of the ring
road
.
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