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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people,however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The map shows the changes that were made to the road structure of a city hospital from 2007 to 2010. In general, there are three significant changes, which are basically about car parking, roundabouts and
bus
stops
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. More specifically, we can compare the two maps and discover that in 2007, there were several
bus
 stops on Hospital
Rd
, but in 2010, those
bus
 stops were substituted by a new
bus
 station
at
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 the west side of Hospital
Rd
.
Also
, two new roundabouts is
built in
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 2010. One is at the north end of Hospital
Rd
, intersecting the Ring Road and Hospital
Rd
. Another is at the south end of Hospital
Rd
, which is the intersection of City Road and Hospital
Rd
. These two roundabouts connect the
bus
 station with the roads.
Moreover
, it's noticeable that the original car park at the east side of Hospital
Rd
 in 2007 was for both staff and
public
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. In 2010, the original car park is
only
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access
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 to staff.
However
, there is a new carpark for
public
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the public
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 located
at
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 the east side of City Hospital.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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