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The figure shows the
consumption
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 of fast food by Australian Teenagers from 1975 to 2000. In general, the
consumption
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 of hamburgers and pizza has increased a lot from less than 20
times
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 per
year
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 to more than 80 or even 100
times
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 per
year
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.
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,
fish
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 and
chips
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has
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have
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 experienced a rapid decrease from about 100
times
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 per
year
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 to less than 40
times
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 per
year
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. The
consumption
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 of
fish
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 and
chips
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has
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had
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 a brief rise between 1980 and 1985,
while
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 it
continues
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has continued
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 to decline since
then
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. 1985 is
also
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 the time when the
consumption
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 relationship between
fish
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 and two other junk foods changed. Before 1985, teenagers
eat
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ate
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 more
fish
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 and
chips
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,
then
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 they
prefer
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preferred
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 hamburgers to the previous 2 kinds of junk food and at about 1990 the
consumption
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 of hamburgers
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 overtook
the
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apply
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fish
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 and
chips
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.
Besides
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, pizza
consumption
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 grew faster and faster until it
leveled
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levelled
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 off after 1995 and hamburger growth gradually slowed down and
it
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apply
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also
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 stabilized around 1995. From the trend in the figure, the
fish
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 are most likely to continue to decline.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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