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Living in a city is bad for health. To what extent, Do you agree?

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It is universal knowledge that many
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 problems stem from urban’s life activities.
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, some
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 advocate for leaving the city for their well-being.
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’s
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 and give my opinion. On the one hand, there is no doubt that most citizens are vulnerable to breathing problems.
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 is because many cars and factories release toxic gases into the atmosphere, which will
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 be inhaled by
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 living nearby.
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, these dangerous chemicals slowly destroy their respiratory systems and cause asthma or lung cancer.
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,
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’s mental
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 is severely degrading due to the luxurious lifestyle in the city. By playing loud music at night and abusing lighting systems in tall buildings, many citizens make it impossible for others to sleep comfortably, meaning they become bad-tempered in the morning.
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, the government struggles to control viruses from spreading during pandemics as rules are not followed strictly. It can be inferred from the COVID-19 outbreak that the more populated a city is, the more likely its hospitals are to become overloaded.
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, we must acknowledge the benefits of living in metropolitans, particularly healthcare. Those supporting the urban lifestyle claim that hospitals there cure diseases much faster and more efficiently than suburban areas do, thanks to the development of technology. They
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 argue that many big cities are successful in sustaining an environment suitable for living.
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, Amsterdam, the capital of the Netherlands, reports a dramatic drop in lung problems when authorities encourage
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 to use eco-friendly methods of
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 like public transport or bicycles.
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, since many metropolitans are still under-developed, predominantly Asian or African, they will probably not see the same changes
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 those in the West. In short, living in big cities on
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’s
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 remains negative. Many measures have to be taken to make metropolitans’ environment safe for
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 to stay in.
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