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In many countries, more and more people buy a wider range of household goods like television,microwave oven and rice cooker. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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The main changes within the town of Kimsville between 2002 and the present are shown
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 the two maps. To sum up, Kimsville has become much more modernized, in
term
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 of facilities and buildings over the two decades, but there are still retained sections in the town. When it comes to unchanged parts, the most obvious one is the location of
shopping
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the shopping
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center
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, which is located on the north side of the city
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.
Additionally
,the greenery in the right corners in Kimsville has
also
 been maintained so far.
However
,the trees in the top left corner have been turned into new apartments, while the ones in the left bottom corner have been changed into
football
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stadium
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.The previous old cinema below the
center
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 has been made into a pub and a transformation from a factory into
software
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 company could be witnessed currently.
Lastly
, the sole vacancy adjacent to the city
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 has been used to construct a new train station.
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