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In their advertising business nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative devlopment? write at least 250 words.

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 modern world companies often, claim in their advertisements that their item is new
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 aspects. The manufacturing plant employees have deliberation that, through
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 they can increase their profit ratio and
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 make their place in the competitive market. I consider
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 to be a positive aspect because it benefits
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both,
customers
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 and the
company
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. A
company
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, consider their sell numbers
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 a minor alteration in their
product
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 in order to market that as brand new.
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 they have not made a considerable improvement that changes the whole
product
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, they sell that with new labels, with confidence it can change customer lives.
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, Apple
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 sell their line of iPhones each year with minor technological improvements and
customers
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 are energetically buying that because of trust in the brand.
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,
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 development is positive, because, as it not only helps the brand to grow more in numbers of their sales figures but
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 by providing
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 advanced version of that item.
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, the companies now claim, that they have made products using fully automated technology and with absolute minimal errors.
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 technique is attracting more buyers, they have seen
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 in their profit ratio,
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, the
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 receive the highest quality
product
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. In summary, fascinating
customers
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 about the
product
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 displayed as new gives monetary benefits to the
company
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, and as the
company
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 grows that continue to serve
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customers
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 with
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advanced
 products.
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 as new is a positive development.
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