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Nowadays people work too hard? What is the reason for this? what should employers do to prevent employees from overworking?

#people #work #reason #employers #employees
INDIVIDUALS TEND TO WORK A LOT IN THE RECENT ERA.
THIS
 TREND IS A RESULT OF INFINITIVE DEMANDS OF EMPLOYERS AND A HUGE AMOUNT OF WORKLOAD.
HOWEVER
, THERE ARE SOME REMEDIES WHICH MAY SOLVE
THIS
.
THIS
 ESSAY WILL EXPLAIN THE REASONS AND SOLUTIONS IN DETAIL. TO COMMENCE WITH, MANY FACE A HUGE PEALE OF TASKS THAT SHOULD BE DONE EACH WORKDAY
DAY
.
THIS
 IS
AS A RESULT
 OF NOT ENOUGH STUFF AVAILABLE IN A OFFICE.
FOR EXAMPLE
, MANY OF BANKS IN MY COUNTRY SERVICE THE CUSTOMERS ONLY WITH THE HELP OF ONE OPERATOR WHICH MAY CAUSE A HARD WORKDAY
DAY
 FOR THAT WORKER.
ALSO
, NOWADAYS, EMPLOYEES ARE MUCH MORE DEMANDING THEY ASK THE EMPLOYEES TO FINISH A TASK IN VERY LESS TIME WICH THE ONLY WAY FOR OVERCOMING TO
THIS
 DEMAND IS TO WORK HARD EVERY
DAY
 AT THE WORKPLACE. CONSIDERING THE CAUSES BELOW THERE ARE SOME MAJOR REMEDIES FOR
THIS
.
FIRST
 REMEDY
CONCERNING
Replace the word
CONCERNS
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 MANAGERS WHO COULD LESSEN THE WORKLOAD BY HIRING MORE
WORKERS
. THE NUMBER OF
WORKERS
 COULD FINISH A TASK FASTER AND WITH LESS PRESSURE ON THEIR SHOULDERS RATHER THAN A SOLO WORKER. ANOTHER REMEDY IS CREATING ENTERTAINING FACILITIES FOR
WORKERS
SUCH
 AS A PLAYROOM. HAVING SUBTLE CONDITIONS IN THE WORKPLACE IS VERY SIGNIFICANT IN LOWERING THE WORK PRESSURE.
FOR INSTANCE
, THE HEADQUARTERS COULD ACESS A SHORT TIME EACH
DAY
 FOR
WORKERS
 FOR THEIR ENTERTAINMENT
SUCH
 AS PLAYING ON A TENNIS COURT.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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