Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree? write at least 250 words.

A large number of
food
items
and beverages made by companies have high levels of
sugar
contained in them, which is the major reason for serious health issues in our society. The problem will not resolve by adding state
taxes
on it,
however
encouraging individuals for healthy eating habits and showing the terrible effects of
sugar
can create awareness among citizens. I certainly, do not agree
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the notion of
implication
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of an additional tax on
sugar
products
.
Sugar
contained
products
are harming humans as it gives prolonged diseases. To reduce the consumption of
sugar
, additional government duties will not help.
Sugar
products
, mostly the fast
food
items
are now the part of our daily life, and
percisely
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precisely
the young
generaion
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generation
is more found of it.
Thus
, adding
taxes
will not display a significant reduction in the number of
people's
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people
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eating less sweet
items
.
However
, creating awareness about the detrimental effects of
sugar
in our body can be the one way to convince our society for eating less
sweet
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sweets
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.
For instance
, putting
a side
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aside
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ffects
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effects
of
sugar
in the educational syllabus, teaching students from an early age so they can avoid it,
also
a child can suggest
their
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parents about the side effects.
Furthermore
, the
taxes
on
such
food
items
will only increase prices by some fraction, because of that the
products
are still affordable to most of the general
popullation
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population
. The
fast
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fast-food
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food
and soft drinks we have today are considered
the
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apply
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cheap in comparison to healthy alternatives, by the cause of
this
,
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children
childrens
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children
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and the majority of people
tent
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to have
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ready to eat fast
food
and soft drinks. To change
this
,
for example
- junk
food
chains should
also
provide healthy
food
items
than only junk
food
. If there are more
affortable
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affordable
healthy
items
in contrast
with the junk
food
in the market people can have that. In
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summery
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, by giving the education of how dreadful
sugar
can be, and
also
creating alternatives for the sweet
products
and drinks we can lower the risk of problems
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with
suagr
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sugar
, in our nationals. I certainly do not agree with the notion,
the
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that the
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implication of
taxes
will solve the
sugar
consumption problem.
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