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Artificial intelligence will soon replace teachers in the classroom. Do you agree with this statement? What is an alternative to traditional face to face teaching?

#intelligence #teachers #classroom #alternative #face
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Introduction
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people
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machine
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teacher's
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 responsibilities in the classroom.
This
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 of AI technology in
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the educational
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 system ,as well as different methods to communicate rather than
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 one (face to face) will be provided. There are several
constriants
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constraints
 of
substituing
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substituting
 instructors by AI.
Firstly
, the
machine
 can not develop a profound relationship with students as it is
non-physical
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a non-physical
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 system;
for example
, when the students need to talk with
instructor
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an instructor
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 in
leizure
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leisure
 time, AI is incapable
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 generating conversation.
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the connection
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 between students and the
machine
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failure
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Moreover
, there is an issue with the student's concentration. the smart
machine
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 controlling
learner
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learners
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 because it was given the logical coding for teaching only.
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this
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why
smart
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machine
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the entire
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 educational system.
Although
 traditional communication is effective, in some cases,
this
 method is probably not suitable and comfortable. Currently,
people
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a great pandemic, COVID19. It is better to make
a
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communication through developed technologies;
such
 as Augmented Reality and Zoom application.
Firstly
, Augmented Reality, in short AR, could provide a great experience of learning even though
people
 are living
at
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 their
home
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 by wearing AR glasses.
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, usage of
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 application
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 to be a popular way for education and
working
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 because
people
 could do their conference
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digital
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a digital
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 platform
instead
 of going to the office.
Thus
, they can economize
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 expenditures. In short, The replacement of
teacher
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 can not be practically done by artificial intelligence. humans generally need to develop relationships with other
people
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also
 still require someone to help them
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomous learning
  • blended learning
  • personalized learning
  • adaptive testing
  • virtual classrooms
  • interpersonal dynamics
  • emotional intelligence
  • automating grading
  • mentorship
  • geographical constraints
  • digital media
  • educational sector
  • supplementary resources
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