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In many countries the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How Can we deal with those Cause?

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Apparently, it is being observed in many countries that there is a considerable increase in
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 cases and
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 has many
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 behind it related to social and economical
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 along with solutions in the impending paragraphs.
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 with, economical
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 like unemployment and poverty have contributed a lot
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 the increase of criminal activities in society. If
people
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 do not have enough money for their survival, they may choose some illegal ways to earn quick money and
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 will lead them to indulge
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 various crimes.
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, robbing other
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, kidnapping and unlawful betting.
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, social
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 like
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 of movies and
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the influence
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 of bad company among
people
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 especially
younsters
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youngsters
 may not be able to take
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 decision and become habitual of committing
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crime
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a crime
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.
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, they feel pride after doing bad things
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 others.
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, where there is a rapid increase in
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crime
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,
this
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 measures in time. Primarily, there is a need
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 combined efforts from government and companies so that
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 can come up with new plans and policies to
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curb
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 the issues related to joblessness and poverty. If
people
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 have suitable jobs, they may never think about indulging themselves
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 any kind of criminal activity.
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, there is a need to control the
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 promotion in the movies or
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 any media channels in order to decrease the bad impact of these
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 on
people
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. A survey conducted by Oxford University in March
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 2015 clearly unveiled that 65% of
people
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 agreed on the fact that
crime
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 rates had been decreasing in the UK since the government put strict restrictions on
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violence promotion in films. To conclude, it is unequivocal that though
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crime
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 rate is increasing in myriad countries, some measures can control
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policies
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polices
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policies
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 and plans to remove economical
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 and social
causes
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic disparity
  • propensity
  • recidivism
  • deterrent
  • rehabilitative
  • judicial system
  • corruption
  • socioeconomic
  • alienation
  • stigmatization
  • decriminalization
  • enforcement
  • gentrification
  • preemptive measures
  • intervention strategies
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