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In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Disscuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The discussion of whether the governments should allow a small group of individuals
earn
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 much more money than average
people
 is of great concern. While there are some benefits to limiting the salary
level
, I would argue that allowing
people
 to earn more is better than that. The
people
 in
favor
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 of setting a limitation of salary
level
 would be that a revenue beyond
reasonable
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a reasonable
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level
 would damage the
consistence
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consistency
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 of the society. If only a small group could earn a high salary which is difficult for most others to catch up
,
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people
 could never narrow the gap between rich and poor. In
this
 case, the
people
 with less-well
background
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backgrounds
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 might lose the motivation of working hard, since they could not be stimulated by a comfortable standard of life which they are not able to reach. When most
people
 choose to slack off, the development of countries would be stagged.
However
, I would agree with the
people
 who believe that an opportunity for
people
 to gain extreme high salaries would be conducive to the country. Under no circumstances, should governments deprive inhabitants' freedom of earning more money, as long as they obey the laws. It is
the
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 basic right for individuals, and
this
 can encourage
people
 to be creative, which makes progress for
the
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society.
For example
, if a businessman has an access to increasing his income, he would try to create new products or provide better services, which can help
people
 live more comfortably and
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therefore
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therefor
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therefore
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 push the innovation of the countries. To conclude,
although
 some
people
 hold the view that a limitation of revenue
level
 would benefit the country, I believe that if individuals do not break the laws, the governments should allow
people
gain
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 as much as they can.
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