Some parent spend a little free time with their children today. Why is it so? Why do you think this affects more, parents or children?
It is generally acknowledged that
parents
share little leisure time
with their children
in contemporary society. This
essay will outline why they do not have enough time
to spend with their children
and illustrate the impacts on children
.
To begin
with, parents
suffer from hectic schedules at work. Since the prices has
gone up, Change the verb form
have
parents
need an excessive amount of money in order to achieve basic needs such
as accommodation, food, and clothing. Paradoxically, as they have to work to support their children
, they cannot spend enough time
with their children
. Moreover
, the number of single parents
has increased as divorce do
not have a stigma of shame. Single Correct subject-verb agreement
does
parents
have to work and house
Add a missing verb
do house
chore
Fix the agreement mistake
chores
in
Change preposition
during
a
day. Correct article usage
the
For example
. Recent media in Korea has revealed that almost 20% of children
who live with their single parents
stayed alone on children
’s day. As the example clearly illustrates, single parents
have little time
to spend with their children
.
However
, such
trends affect children
’s personality
. Fix the agreement mistake
personalities
Firstly
, children
cannot learn the relationship of
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between
parents
and parents
roles as they do not have Change noun form
parents'
parent's
change
to learn them from their Add an article
a change
the change
parents
.Therefore
, when the children
become adult
, they have difficulties Fix the agreement mistake
adults
to understand
parenthood. Change the verb form
understanding
In addition
, if parents
are not able to share time
with their children
, the children
might have mental health issues. They feel being
neglected, thereby causing a sense of depression and anxiety. Unnecessary verb
apply
Finally
, children
can be exposed to violent games and sexual TV programs owing to the absence of parents
’ monitoring. Hence
, they can be involved in violent behavior
or fall into perverted Change the spelling
behaviour
tendency
. Fix the agreement mistake
tendencies
For instance
, a survey conducted by Korea University reports that nearly 20% of children
who have raised
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been raised
under
single Change preposition
by
parents
are involved in delinquency. Hence
, children
are affected harm by parents
who cannot spend time
with their kids.
In conclusion, due to the
financial status, and single parenting, Change the word
their
parents
cannot share enough time
with their children
. As a result
, such
problems affect their children
not to understand parents’
Correct pronoun usage
their parents’
role
. Fix the agreement mistake
roles
Additionally
, they tend to have mental illnesses and inappropriate tendencies.Submitted by hiasince38 on
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