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In many countries, fast food is becoming cheaper and more widely available. Do the disadvantages of this outweigh the advantages?

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Fast
food
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 is the type of meal that was invented to suit the lifestyle of modern society. It provided us with low cost and convenient
food
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 , that every class of society can enjoy.
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 the biggest concern is that the consumption of fast
food
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 might cause
a
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health
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 problems in the long terms Advantages With the lower cost of fast
food
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 in many
countries
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 it has brought us many benefits.
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 of all , many households who might have low incomes or struggle financially
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can at least guarantee that's
their
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 can feed the members of the house
a
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delicious and comfortable meals. With the addition Because of the decrease in the prices of fast
food
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meal
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meals
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, many
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 workers will benefit from the convenience the fast foods provide. Disadvantage Fast
food
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 always has a reputation of being bad for your
health
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(they sometimes even get called junk foods.).
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 because of the high calories contain in each fast
food
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 meal, consuming junk foods
in
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the
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 daily basis may lead to some help
problem
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,
such
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 as
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diabetes, heart disease , etc.
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 30
percent
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 of Us citizens ( which is the country that fast
food
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 was the main diet) risk of diagnosed
obiesity
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obesity
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Furthermore
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 with many fast
food
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 companies trying to keep the price low,
this
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 might lead to the use of low-quality ingredients, which will eventually lead to
furthermore
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,
health
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 problems. In conclusion , I still believed that the
decreased
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of
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 the price
in
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of
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 fast
food
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 products, outweighed the disadvantages they have brought , because it provided the individual with the comfort of cheap and cheerful meals,
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, we might have to be aware of the downside of fast
food
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 products that impact our
health
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