The manufacturing and use of cars damages the environment but their popularity is increasing. Why is this happening? How could this be controlled?

Cars
are considered to be one of the greatest innovations humanity ever created. It's revolutionized how humans
transported
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. It helps us travel the distance that should have taken days in the past to just a few hours. Our society is
also
giving priority to convenience and a faster lifestyle,
this
is why the popularity of
cars
were
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increasing.
However
, the process of manufacturing and fueling the
car
create
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creates
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pollution that we
cant
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overlook.
Firstly
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invention of new technologies and increasing production capacity of many developed nations have made
cars
more accessible, combined with the society that time was more valuable than ever made the demand for automobiles rise exponentially. With the rising demand for its products ,many
automobile
companies see
this
as an opportunity for profit. We have seen many
automobile
companies have a great leap in their value.
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addition of increasing demand and greater production capacity of automobiles ,
this
makes the manufacturing of the
automobile
product increased as well.
However
, we have to regulate the manufacturing process and the
usage
of the
car
. Because of the pollution its
produce
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. Here are some of the solutions.
First
The
government
of each nation can create policy encouraging each
automobile
companies
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company
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to manufacture more
eco friendly
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eco-friendly
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or green vehicles,
such
as
,
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electric
cars
, hybrid
cars
, etc.
Although
this
method might
has
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some obstacles,
Firstly
this
type of
car
was not accessible to everybody, because the price of it
usually
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in the high range.
Secondly
is how inconvenient the
car
can be
for example
,time to charge, there were not many charging locations for electric
cars
.
For
instance
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this
is why the
second
solution came in. The
government
can develop the infrastructure of public transport and encourage more people to use it. We have seen how fully developed public transport can decrease the
usage
of
cars
,
for
example
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the city of Tokyo has less
usage
of
cars
compare
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to Bangkok despite having almost twice the population . Still, the
government
must ensure that their public transport system were reliable and accessible to most of the population for
this
method to
success
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. In
conclusion
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the environmental problem created by
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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and
usage
of
cars
must be dealt with seriously.
This
is why I have been convinced that the
government
may need to take more direct actions to regulate and improve the condition of manufacture and
usage
of
cars
.
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