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Today, in spite of the scientifically proven necessity of life-long learning, the idea that innate intelligence (thinking skills) is enough to have a successful life is dominating the minds of people. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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 of people
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 that inherited natural intelligence is enough to have fortunate life despite the proven necessity of
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lifelong
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 learning.
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 essay will
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 suggest that the main problems caused by
this
 phenomenon are possible lack of qualified
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 in future and rising of unintelligent
generation
 and
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 argue that granting working places for educated people and proper promotion of academic life are
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 efficient ways of solution. If
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 part of
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the population
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 doesn’t regard big attention to tutoring,
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small
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 proportion of people will be well educated. Complicated professions which
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 deep knowledge in some spheres will be vacant. It
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 will cause the
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 of
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generation
.
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 value of schooling among
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generation
 will result in their engagement in
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 process. Representatives of
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generation
 will not study hard and according to
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researches
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of
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 Harvard, their brain development will be decelerated.
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 factor of not studying is being afraid that you will not work
on
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 your studied profession so granting relevant working places for senior students will motivate them to study what they want. Promotion of academic life means that fields of science will be
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 in order to engage children to study and help to find students sphere that will interest them.
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 attitude of
life-long
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the life-long
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 learning phenomenon is
valid
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a valid
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 problem nowadays which can cause problems
such
 as
deficiency
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the deficiency
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 of qualified masters and
‘mindless’
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the ‘mindless’
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generation
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