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Some experts claim that most of the outstanding innovations and breakthroughs have been made by people with a high level of so-called ‘innate intelligence’. What are the advantages and disadvantages of relying on this theory in order to succeed in life for an ordinary people?

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Today, scientists offer many hypotheses about the
people
 who created new discoveries and innovations. Some of them claim that most were made at the hands of those who had hostile mental faculties.
However
, every coin has two sides, so it has its positives and negatives.
For
example
, as the inspiration of others, or
conversely
 the disadvantage of ordinary
people
 because of their mental abilities. The successes of others always make us strive for more, which is why when ordinary
people
 see the discoveries of other "special" inventors, it leads to motivation and the desire for more.
For
example
, when ordinary
people
 see innovation at the hands of
people
 who have innate abilities, it will serve as an
example
 to them of how to build on their discoveries to develop or get motivated to create something new. But one cannot ignore the fact that
such
 a
theory
 can lead to the division of
people
 into ordinary and special.
Such
 a division can be a cause of dis-motivation.
This
theory
 will lead to the fact that
people
 who do not have talent in their genes will not try to discover something new, because they will have an impression that they will not succeed. The
theory
, based on the
example
 of
people
 with innate talents for ordinary
people
, required an analysis of the positive and negative sides of the above. On the one hand,
this
theory
 can serve as an
example
 for new innovations, but at the same
time
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 it can make ordinary
people
 give up.
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