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Environment protection should be the responsibility of politicians, not indiviuals as individuals can do too little. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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This
 line table represents how much some kinds of fast food
was
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were
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 consumed by adolescents a
year
 in Australia from 1975 to2000. To sum up,there was a sharp increase in the frequency of hamburgers and pizza eaten per
year
 while a drop
of
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in
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 fish and chips. In 1975, hamburgers and pizza are eaten very little, with the
times
 of about 10 and 5 respectively. Hamburgers’
times
 eaten rose quickly in the
next
 10 years,exceeding
times
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the times
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 of fish and chips in 1985, after which it grows
in
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at
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 a gradually lower speed until 2000 up to 100
times
. Meanwhile, the frequency teenagers ate pizza
also
 grew steadily from 1975 to 1995 and remained 80
times
 per
year
 after that.
However
,
although
 fish and chips held the highest number in 1975,it decreased dramatically during the
next
 25 years,which end up
with
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at
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 40
times
 per
year
. It had a trend to bound up in 1985,but no miracle occurred after that.
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