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When someone achieves greatness thanks to an innovation or other breakthrough, it is usually agreed that the individual has a high level of intelligence. Do you think that inborn thinking skills play the main role in the successful life of people? What role does ‘nurtured’ intelligence play in achievements of a successful person?

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In everyday life, we can observe that when someone reaches heights in the field of new rollbacks or innovation, many find the credit for it in the high
intellect
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. Inborn thinking
skills
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, as well as other human
abilities
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 and talents, play a major role in a
person
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's development.
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, many people do not believe that innate
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 can lead a
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 to great success in science
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 because it is much more important to "nurture" the qualities and
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 of thinking. By "nurtured," it means thinking that occurred
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 of reflection and life experience
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 because it is what will help a
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 succeed. I do not believe that innate
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 can, without much effort, lead to great success. There are many who have various intellectual
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 in their genes, but without much effort and
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 these
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 will not be valid.
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, someone who has had a high
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 since childhood, but has made no effort to develop it, will be much worse than someone who has nurtured that
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 in himself. It is inherent in a
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's search for himself, in the cultivation of some qualities in himself. If a
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 will develop his thinking, try to be better and be in constant search,
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 will sooner or later lead him to success.
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, we learn more and more each time we are searching, and a cultivated
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 means a
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's desire to achieve. To summarize, high intelligence can be both innate and nurtured. In both cases,
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, it is important to be in constant search of and improvement in the quality of one's
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