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When someone achieves greatness thanks to an innovation or other breakthrough, it is usually agreed that the individual has a high level of intelligence. Do you think that inborn thinking skills play the main role in the successful life of people? What role does ‘nurtured’ intelligence play in achievements of a successful person?

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In everyday life, we can observe that when someone reaches heights in the field of new rollbacks or innovation, many find the credit for it in the high
intellect
. Inborn thinking
skills
, as well as other human
abilities
 and talents, play a major role in a
person
's development.
However
, many people do not believe that innate
abilities
 can lead a
person
 to great success in science
,
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 because it is much more important to "nurture" the qualities and
skills
 of thinking. By "nurtured," it means thinking that occurred
as a result
 of reflection and life experience
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 because it is what will help a
person
 succeed. I do not believe that innate
skills
 can, without much effort, lead to great success. There are many who have various intellectual
abilities
 in their genes, but without much effort and
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 these
abilities
 will not be valid.
For example
, someone who has had a high
intellect
 since childhood, but has made no effort to develop it, will be much worse than someone who has nurtured that
intellect
 in himself. It is inherent in a
person
's search for himself, in the cultivation of some qualities in himself. If a
person
 will develop his thinking, try to be better and be in constant search,
this
 will sooner or later lead him to success.
For example
, we learn more and more each time we are searching, and a cultivated
intellect
 means a
person
's desire to achieve. To summarize, high intelligence can be both innate and nurtured. In both cases,
however
, it is important to be in constant search of and improvement in the quality of one's
skills
.
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