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Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of the society. Others, however, believe that schools are the best places to learn this. Discuss both these views.

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When it comes to
teach
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 the basic
life
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 lesson of offspring, the people are divided into two. few groups of individuals opine that
children
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's caretakers should teach their
children
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 how to become good members, whereas others think that a
school
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 is an important location for it. According to the
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 viewpoint,
parents
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 are considered the main pillar for shaping the child's
life
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. To put it another way,
children
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 have grown up with their
parents
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 since birth. So,
children
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 have an emotional bond with their
parents
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. Because of
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,
children
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 can not deny the
life
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 lesson and discipline, which has been taught by their
parents
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. With regard to the
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 point of view, the
school
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 not only teaches an academic lesson but
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 teaches good qualities like obedience, honesty, resilience, hard-working, consistency, etc.
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, due to work, most of the
children
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's
parents
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 can not spend most of their time with the
children
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,
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,
children
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 have to go to
school
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 daily, and because of
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, they have received benefits, for most of their
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 lessons
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 as moral and ethics are taught by their tutors. In regard to
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 way,
school
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 is considered an important place. To sum up, I’d conclude that both entities have their unique impact on
children
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. But the schools cannot replace the role and responsibility of
parents
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 in making a child become a responsible person as
institute
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 deal with a vast number of
children
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 and the mindset of every child varies.
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,
children
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 are more attached to their
parents
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, so their behaviour reflects their
parents
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.

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