Children can learn effectively by watching television. Therefore they should be encouraged to watch television regularly at home and at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that learning is easy by watching
television
.
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hence
,they encourage their
children
to
watching
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television
not only at home but
also
at school.In my opinion,I totally oppose
this
matter.I would like to explain why I
am not agree
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for
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with
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that. To
bigin
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begin
with,
the
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most
of
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students like to spend on social
medias
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media's
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name as
facebook
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,
instagram
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,
whatsapp
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WhatsApp
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,u tube and as well as
television
is in.Nowadays,there are lots of issues in society.For
instence
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instance
,some adults can not
to
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cost
for
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education of
there
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pupils due to
this
economical problem in the world.Because of that,
children
are stimulated for watching educational
programme
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programmes
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regularly.As I think,if there is a
television
in the school no need teachers for teach.
On the other hand
,
this
impact mostly
effect
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for future of
children
.
Secondly
,pupils are not learning well without
encaraging
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encouraging
.All
of
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parents
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the parents
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must think about
children's
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their children's
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future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • passive
  • sedentary
  • limit
  • creativity
  • imagination
  • educational content
  • expose
  • different cultures
  • perspectives
  • negative effects
  • behavior
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