You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter •say how you feel about his performance •give details of your musical activities •explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

Dear Amy Horner, I am a huge fan of your
music
and writing to congratulate you on a brilliant performance at the City Emporium yesterday evening which I am sure everyone enjoyed to the fullest. It was simply breathtaking and electrifying to me and my friends who were
also
present at the concert. I have always dreamt of seeing your performance live and yesterday was one of the best days of my life to have the chance for the
first
time. I am an aspiring musician and I started playing the electric guitar and drums at a very tender age of 9. I can
also
play the flute
besides
composing a few songs for the band I am involved in. I have been a member of a local
music
band called "Window of Dreams" for the
last
six years and we primarily focus on playing pop and rock
music
. You have always been my idol as a musician and songwriter. I am sure you are busy, but I am hoping that you would share some tips and provide some mentorship to help me do better in
music
. I would appreciate it if you can spare some of your precious time to guide me which will eventually be a great help for me to
further
enhance my skills and boost my confidence. Thank you very much for your contributions to the
music
world. Yours sincerely, Emily Knight
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • moreover
  • also
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