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These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country.

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Nowadays living abroad to study and work is gradually becoming popular and developing into
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. For many people, especially young adults, the chance to spend an extended period of time overseas is an attractive one. But people who live abroad can
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. So, in the
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 I will explore the pros and cons of living in a foreign country. Let's begin by looking
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 the advantages
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 away. Living in a new country
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broadens
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 your knowledge and horizon.
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, it could help you to get some benefits in learning
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For example
, if you take education in another country
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 level of the foreign language.
On the other hand
, you could face some serious problems when you are in
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 having a feeling of isolation due to communicating in a
second
 language or a culture shock and the general cost of living and so on. You’ll have to live alone without your family by your side studying while doing make you very tired.
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 conclusion,
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 you will face many problems
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try to be prepared to overcome
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. Personally, I believe the benefits in
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 of personal growth eventually outweigh any drawbacks.
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