Some universities offer online courses as an alternative to classes delivered on campus. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In parallel with the incredible development of technology,
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curriculum is gradually replacing
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face-to-face classes. Personally,
although
this
movement has some negative impacts on students, I am still more inclined
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the benefits that it can bring to the learners. On the one hand, offering distance education has some vital downsides.
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, when taking part in
this
study method, students may suffer from
the
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lack of virtual interaction with teachers and peers. Due to
this
reason, they may hardly broaden their knowledge,
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for
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further
advice or supports from
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others, especially in cases they get stuck with confusing information.
Second
, learning online requires a lot of self-discipline of trainees to complete all the tasks on
time
because of various
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coming from the surrounding environment
such
as noise pollution, unstable Internet connection or even the temptation of games or social media.
On the other hand
, from my perspective, the benefit of delivering the online program brings more pros outweighing
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. It provides students with
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more flexible and cost-saving lessons which do not require them to pay extra fees for maintaining in-build facilities.
Furthermore
, by
this
type of education, learners can easily access
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whatever courses they prefer without the barrier of geographical distance or the lack of
time
due to work while studying. They can
also
proactively adjust the
time
schedule and the pace of study to balance it with other essential activities,
for instance
, the
time
for caring
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members, doing exercise or even entertainment. It helps student remain not only their learning motivation but
also
their physical and mental health by preventing them from overload, stress or depression. In conclusion, having
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course
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to choose
at
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almost universities benefits learners in various ways. Despite the occurrence of some drawbacks, I believe they could be soon accounted for
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on the development of technological tools
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a teacher

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teacher
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can use to support their main lectures
such
as
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time
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or team-meeting software.
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