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Everyone should stay in school until the age of eighteen. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#school #age #eighteen
It is generally thought by a group of individuals that if any student wants to become a successful person they will need to proper education. So, they ought to stay in
school
 until the
age
 of eighteen. I concord with
this
 viewpoint, yet there are some disagreements as to whether requiring proper education means students have to stay in
school
 until the
age
 of 18. There are many reasons behind for not leaving
school
 but the foremost reason is that the institute not only teaches subjects like science, history, commerce, etc but
also
 teaches to pupils the moral and ethics lesson. Because of
this
, in the future, students will receive benefits in terms of getting a job.
However
, if students leave
school
 from an earlier
age
, they have to do unskilled work
such
 as workers in a factory in the future.
In addition
, young people who stay in
school
 up to the
age
 of 18, a mature and respectful person of the society's perspective. To put it another way, the
school
 teaches the children to respect their elders.
However
, there are equally important arguments against making
school
 compulsory. One of the arguments is that
school
 is not required in terms of internship programs.
For example
, anybody who wants to become a car mechanic can find better career opportunities and learn practical lessons from an apprentice scheme. Owing to today's globalization of the world, young people are maturing ever more quickly and are able to make their own life decisions by the
age
 of 16. By way of conclusion, once again I reaffirm my opinion is that everyone should be encouraged to stay in
school
 until the
age
 of 18,
however
, it would be a mistake to make
this
 compulsory.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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