International tourism has greatly benefited many places. However, there have been major concerns about its impact on the local environment and inhabitants. Do the negative impacts of international tourism outweigh the benefits?

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The(the yok) international tourism ensures many different benefits in many places but according to some people, there is an effect of major concerns about its impact on the local environment and inhabitants. I think, there are both positive and negative sides

about

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(to)

this

statement. because

although

the(the yok) tourism develops (a) country(country’s) economy, It may

effect

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(affect) negatively for(for yok) local citizens. Both of these viewpoints will be outlined in detail before concluding.68

To begin

with, International Tourism is the door to many opportunities and wealth(zenginlik). Recent research suggests that focusing on

tourists

can be more beneficial because they spend a lot of money where they go.

For instance

, many

tourists

come to Antalya every year and they need accommodation, transportation and many different

necessaries

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(necessities).

Therefore

, my father sells clothes which they may like.

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earn

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(s) amounts of) cashes. Not only my father earns money but

also

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hotels'

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bosses

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(hotel's boss) and different sectors' employers. At the same time when we go to some country to be a tourist, we buy something too. 101

On the other hand

, these

tourists

disturb many citizens because they visit as (a) group. They usually travel and stay at(in) the same places. so they make a lot of noise.

This

is a problem which is being talked up by some as a very

serios

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serious

(serious) threat.

In addition

, local citizens can not understand what they say

amoung

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among

(among) them .

Therefore

this

issue cause(s) (a) negative impact for(on) local individuals. 67 To sum up,

although

increasing a(the) number of

tourists

may (have) some negative effects, (the) positive sides

outweight

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outweigh

(outweigh). 253

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International tourism has greatly benefited many places. However, there have been major concerns about its impact on the local environment and inhabitants. Do the negative impacts of international tourism outweigh the benefits?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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