International tourism has greatly benefited many places. However, there have been major concerns about its impact on the local environment and inhabitants. Do the negative impacts of international tourism outweigh the benefits?

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The(the yok) international tourism ensures many different benefits in many places but according to some people, there is an effect of major concerns about its impact on the local environment and inhabitants. I think, there are both positive and negative sides

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the(the yok) tourism develops (a) country(country’s) economy, It may

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(affect) negatively for(for yok) local citizens. Both of these viewpoints will be outlined in detail before concluding.68

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with, International Tourism is the door to many opportunities and wealth(zenginlik). Recent research suggests that focusing on

tourists

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can be more beneficial because they spend a lot of money where they go.

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, many

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come to Antalya every year and they need accommodation, transportation and many different

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(necessities).

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, my father sells clothes which they may like.

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earn

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(s) amounts of) cashes. Not only my father earns money but

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(hotel's boss) and different sectors' employers. At the same time when we go to some country to be a tourist, we buy something too. 101

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, these

tourists

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disturb many citizens because they visit as (a) group. They usually travel and stay at(in) the same places. so they make a lot of noise.

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is a problem which is being talked up by some as a very

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, local citizens can not understand what they say

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issue cause(s) (a) negative impact for(on) local individuals. 67 To sum up,

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increasing a(the) number of

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may (have) some negative effects, (the) positive sides

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International tourism has greatly benefited many places. However, there have been major concerns about its impact on the local environment and inhabitants. Do the negative impacts of international tourism outweigh the benefits?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Many areas in the globe depend on tourism as a major source of income. Sadly, tourism might be a source of problem if it is not well managed. discuss the advantage and disadvantage of tourism and give opinion

Mobile phones have changed the way people communicate. Nowadays people cannot live without them if they want to be a part of society. To what extent do you think this is true? Why do you think some people have not adapted to this type of communication?

Students are becoming more and more reliant on technology. What are some of the problems associated with reliance on computers, and what are some of the possible solutions?

It is generally believed that education is of vital importance to individual development and the well-being of societies What should education consist of to fulfill both these functions

Some people think they have the right to use as much fresh water they want, but others believe government should control the use of freshwater as it is a limited resource.