Movies and computer games containing violence are popular. Some people say they have a negative effect on society and should be censored. Others say they are just harmless relaxation. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Nowadays there is a strong belief that
computer
games
have a huge steady rise through the community which may include vicious content. A number of
people
assume
this
may cause various minuses through society and it needs to be abolished. Other
people
feel the
games
are created only for giving
possibility
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the possibility
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to
people
for enjoying a leisure time.
First
and foremost, there are several segments of
people
such
as
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a teenager

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teenager
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teenagers

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who may have
higher
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tendency to be tempted for playing the game mostly.
Furthermore
,
computer
games
may not mention the exact age of the
games
and because of it making damage to players. To illustrate
this
, in my school years, numerous clubs were opened near the musical educational
center
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. After the classes, one of my classmates went to the club and wasted money gaining a purchase of two hours duration.
As a result
, he fell into game addiction and gained the
behavior
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of an aggressor. On a positive note,
computer
games
may have numerous contents and not only include sinister characteristics, assassination or other frightening symbols. After a busy working day,
people
may feel they want to spend their time watching light comedies or playing a variety of
games
.
For instance
, one year ago when I was fully concentrated on doing television programs, before that I had done the research for three months and comprehended that my brain needs some relax and I have to spend my time doing something easy and joyful.
Thus
, I understood that
computer
card
games
help me to calm my mind and fix my concentration. To conclude, in the 21st century lots of media platforms, including movies and device
games
, contain violent content for society. Many
people
believe it will create/cause psychological injuries for lots of
people
, while others suppose
computer
games
may be considered a way of balancing method.
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