Nowadays more and more people are spending less time at home. Why do you think it happens? What effect does this have on individuals and the society?

We
all
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faced with
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unprecedented
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time
which is
pandemic
. Most of the
goverments
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governments
government
wanted their
citizenship
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to stay
home
. After
long
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time
staying
home
, we all want to
socialice
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socialise
socialize
more than ever. Due to
this
reason more and more
peope
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people
are spending less
time
at
home
. Spending more
time
at
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the
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outdoor
effects
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our mental and physical health in
good
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way.
Pandemic
put so much pressure on our sanity. Staying long
indoor
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is not good for our
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psychology
physiology
. We all are social animals and talking to someone,
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and
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sharing moments are our basic needs. We waited
to
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too
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long to embrace our loved ones during Covid. Now, we all enjoy our
time
to socialise so staying
home
time
would be less than ever. Because we were looking forward to seeing our friends and families. As long as we find the balance to cover the
time
we lost during
pandemic
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, we will feel better mentally.
Beside
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that, we haven't been active enough. Wasting
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our
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out
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our
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time
on the same sofa in our small houses wasn't something good for our physical health. We should work out well to put back what we lost
phsysicaly
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physically
physical
. Other than that, we may get sick easily now or in the future. It is in our nature to be active and we have to do what we have to do
stay
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active. In
conclution
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conclusion
, we should be aware of the
time
we spent at
home
during the
pandemic
and it wasn't something acceptable for our mental and physical health as well. Spending less
time
home
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at home
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is part of gaining back
of
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our
mental
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mental-physical
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physical
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and physical
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healt
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health
back.
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