In some cultures, childrens are often told they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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In some countries, people think they should exaggerate the abilities of
children
and it is a cultural habit among them. So they usually tend to tell
children
that they could achieve anything if
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hardworking.
Although
giving motivation would help younger people to have more confidence, it could have some negative points if they do not reach their goals. On the one hand,
this
is irrefutable that confidence and credibility are influenced by your beliefs;
Moreover
, hearing some positive sentences could raise your trust in yourself.
This
means that, even if your duty is hard, you may have enough energy to reach the prospect. A good example of
this
idea is my son when I enrolled him on a music class. At
first,
he thought that could not play any musical instrument, yet, after many encouragements from his tutor found the way and now he is an excellent player.
On the other hand
,
this
cultural belief may not work in any situation.
Firstly
, sometimes
children
may have not enough creativity to reach their ambitions.
Secondly
, without any doubt on some occasions, the final result is affected by outer conditions which they could not have any control over . These reasons will probably produce undesirable results which make inappropriate feelings
such
as disappointment, anxiety or stress. A survey conducted by an Iranian university in 2021 showed that over one-fifth of the younger generation feel
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as they worked hard for acceptance in a public university and ensure to achieve, but the result was different. In conclusion,
while
knowing positive thoughts and believing in yourself is a great approach to growing youngsters' trust in their ability, I would say, it should be based on talents and reality.
Then
, parents could help
children
to know themselves and forecast every outcome. So
this
is less probability of
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frustration even if the issue
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is
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not their will.
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task response
Provide more specific examples to support your points and address the disadvantages of giving children this message.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • inspiration
  • motivation
  • work ethic
  • resilience
  • self-confidence
  • self-worth
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • frustration
  • self-esteem
  • pressure
  • anxiety
  • individual effort
  • collaboration
  • social support
  • systemic factors
  • talent
  • opportunity
  • luck
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