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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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It is apparent that in these modern days
people
 tend to travel by
car
 more often which causes a high demand for
cars
. While a
number
 of roads cannot catch up with the rate of
cars
 and it causes heavy congestion in the big cities around the world. From my point of view, I totally agree with the latter statement.
Moreover
, the government should take serious action on policy on how to reduce the
number
 of
cars
. It is true today that
people
 own
cars
 more than before, not only the population of humans on the earth is rising but there are numerous reasons why
people
 choose to roam by their own
car
.
Firstly
, It is more convenient than travelling by public transportation
such
 as a bus , boat or train.
For example
, buses sometimes can be late or not on time, while owning a
car
 would not cause
this
 problem.
Secondly
, with an improvement of new technology in
cars
 and so many interesting features just as an autopilot function from Tesla motor company.
Therefore
, the desire for auto grows rapidly. 
However
, the government should play an important role in reducing the
number
 of
cars
 and being responsible for delivering the proper policy for
this
 issue. They should provide an efficient policy for
people
.
For example
, they should raise a tax on the
car
 owner more than before.
In addition
, the authorities can provide suitable public transportation and make it cheaper, much more reliable, and safe.
Thus
,
people
 will definitely choose buses, trains or subways
instead
 of
cars
. In conclusion, the rising of
cars
 causes traffic jams. It is understandable that
people
 select a comfortable technology by owning
cars
.
However
, the government can take action by improving public transportation and keeping more taxes from
car
 owners. Doing so can lead to a less
number
 of
cars
 in the societies.
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