The government should pay to the parents of very young children, so that one of them can stay at home and look after their children. What do you think are the pros and cons of this policy? Justify your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It has been argued that

the

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very young children’s

parents

should be paid

by

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the

government

.

As a result

, one of

parents

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the parents

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can stay with their children to take care of them.

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essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of

such

a measure. On the one hand, there are definite advantages to giving

money

to

parents

of young children in order to persuade them to stay with their child.

Firstly

, by doing so their kids are likely to acquire a stable upbringing. In fact, most

of

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studies

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the studies

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show that the

parents

have an active role in their children’s

life

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so that the appearance of them

beside

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their kids can significantly have positive effects on their personality.

Secondly

,

this

measure can mentally put the

parents

in a good condition. If both

an

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young child’s

parents

are at work,

this

may cause stress in them and make them occupied.

Therefore

, it not only would

adversly

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adversely

affect their mental health but

also

extremely decrease their efficiency

on

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their career.

On the other hand

, paying

to

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parents

from

government

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the government

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can economically cause

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a problem

the problem

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problem

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problems

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. In other

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worlds

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, due to

government

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the government

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have

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to allocate a great deal of

money

for all

of

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parents

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the parents

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of young kids, it is not able to address other issues of the country. By way of example, the problem of lacking enough educational and health

centers

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would not be solved if

government

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the government

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allocates

budget

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the budget

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to

sizeable

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a sizeable

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number of

parents

of young children. On top of that,

this

can dramatically decrease the

parents

’ productivity. Indeed,

pay

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money

to

parents

seems to

incourage

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encourage

them to quit their occupation and just stay at home.

Thus

they can not find

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an opportunity

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opportunity

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opportunities

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to flourish their talents and make the most of their potential. In conclusion,

therefore

, the policy of giving

money

to young children’s

parents

in order to one of them can stay at home to look after their child clearly has benefits and detriments,

such

as increasing the quality of child’s upbringing and

also

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their

parents

’ mental health as pros and declining the ability of

government

to solve other economical issues of the country accompanied by discouraging

parents

to be active and productive as its cons.