some people think that all university students should study whatever they like.others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future,such as those related to science and technology.discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

These days
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useful, while other
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they should go for whatever they love. In my view, gone is the idea of studying for money. To advance a convincing theory I could deal with, following your dreams. If you find your way and be a
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in your job, you will have a higher income. There are many examples related to
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haven’t participated in college or university. They only have followed their dreams.
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of time, when you like your work. But we should consider that
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their income is much more important than their links. Albite is hard to
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not your
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and it is really annoying, those who prefer to
study
for higher bills, think they will be much more success fuller in
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path. On top of that, one the grounds that some
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and what they want from their lives, they just participate in lessons that they think
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them and they will have a better future. Not
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people
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of different industries and
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forces for different positions. To conclude, not
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should
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under pressure for studying
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subject they are not interested in only for money.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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