some people think that all university students should study whatever they like.others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future,such as those related to science and technology.discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

These days
people
place a premium on having a brighter future. Some
people
think students should
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useful, while other
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they should go for whatever they love. In my view, gone is the idea of studying for money. To advance a convincing theory I could deal with, following your dreams. If you find your way and be a
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in your job, you will have a higher income. There are many examples related to
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also
haven’t participated in college or university. They only have followed their dreams.
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of time, when you like your work. But we should consider that
,
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for some
people
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their income is much more important than their links. Albite is hard to
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not your
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and it is really annoying, those who prefer to
study
for higher bills, think they will be much more success fuller in
this
path. On top of that, one the grounds that some
people
really don’t know what are their
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and what they want from their lives, they just participate in lessons that they think
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really
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them and they will have a better future. Not
last
but not least, if all
people
study
only some special topics, it will have dire consequences on jobs in society. We will have
lack
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of different industries and
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forces for different positions. To conclude, not
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should
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under pressure for studying
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subject they are not interested in only for money.
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