In a number of countries, some people think It is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others belleve the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these vlews and give your own opinion.

Today, Some
people
think it is necessary to spend large amounts of
money
on a new faster
railway
, but some
people
believe
money
should be spent on improving existing public transport. In
this
essay, I will be discussing both views.
To begin
with, there are a number of
countries
that do not have very fast railways to travel between cities. Whether these
countries
are underdeveloped or
people
choose not to construct,
this
is the reason behind the
railway
construction. Compared to
countries
that have a very fast
railway
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railways

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, these
countries
have the ability to distribute resources more efficiently.
People
can go to their workplaces that are far away in a short amount of time;
therefore
, some
countries
choose to construct these railways.
On the other hand
, when you spend
money
on upgrading public transportation. You will instantly improve the life of that who use public transportation on the daily basis. They do not have to spend time learning the mechanic of the new
railway
, and that time can be spent on more reasonable stuff. Some
people
do not like going through the learning process and choose what they often use, for
this
, the reason they choose to spend the
money
on improving public transportation. In conclusion, it can go both ways because there are
people
who agree and disagree on where
money
should be spent. It depends on what the majority of
people
want and if the country can afford it or not. If it is reasonable enough and the majority agree on it, will be the clear choice for that country.
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