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In a number of countries, some people think It is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others belleve the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these vlews and give your own opinion.

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Today, Some
people
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 think it is necessary to spend large amounts of
money
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 on a new faster
railway
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, but some
people
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 believe
money
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 should be spent on improving existing public transport. In
this
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 essay, I will be discussing both views.
To begin
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 with, there are a number of
countries
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 that do not have very fast railways to travel between cities. Whether these
countries
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 are underdeveloped or
people
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 choose not to construct,
this
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 is the reason behind the
railway
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 construction. Compared to
countries
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 that have a very fast
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railway
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, these
countries
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 have the ability to distribute resources more efficiently.
People
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 can go to their workplaces that are far away in a short amount of time;
therefore
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, some
countries
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 choose to construct these railways.
On the other hand
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, when you spend
money
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 on upgrading public transportation. You will instantly improve the life of that who use public transportation on the daily basis. They do not have to spend time learning the mechanic of the new
railway
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, and that time can be spent on more reasonable stuff. Some
people
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 do not like going through the learning process and choose what they often use, for
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 , the reason they choose to spend the
money
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 on improving public transportation. In conclusion, it can go both ways because there are
people
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 who agree and disagree on where
money
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 should be spent. It depends on what the majority of
people
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 want and if the country can afford it or not. If it is reasonable enough and the majority agree on it, will be the clear choice for that country.
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