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in some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finshing high school and starting university studies. discuss the advantages and disavantages for young people who decide to do this.

#countries #people #work #travel #year #school #university #studies #disavantages
Nowadays, it becomes very common
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 young people to take
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that
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before
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join
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job
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 or after
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 their graduation. The main
benifit
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benefit
benefits
 of
this
trends
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to
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 gain some knowledge and
experience
 of something but
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the
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another
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their
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 is a drawback it may affect their future. When the
students
 work or travel after schooling
then
 they apply for their work or college admission. They already have an
experience
 of something.
For
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 a few
foreigh
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foreign
inversities
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universities
 encourage their student to go
this
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 kind of
activities
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activity
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 or they select their
students
 based on
this
experience
 is
additional
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an additional
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benifit
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benefit
benefits
of
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students
 and it can
helps
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to
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them to
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 plan
thier
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their
 future education or get some business plans. The major disadvantage of
this
 approach, they can easily distract from their
studies
.
For example
,
students
 easily get the
admision
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admission
 but after that, they may face some problem to concentrate their
studies
 because after a long break it is difficult to focus on their
studies
. In conclusion,
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talking
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 a break is good because they can gain knowledge and get some
experience
. It will help their future plan. some of the
students
 plan to study after the gap. They will put more concentrate
of
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 their
studies
.
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