in some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finshing high school and starting university studies. discuss the advantages and disavantages for young people who decide to do this.

Nowadays, it becomes very common
from
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young people to take
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that
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before
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job
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or after
complete
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their graduation. The main
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benefits

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of
this
trends
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to
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gain some knowledge and
experience
of something but
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the
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another
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hand
their
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is a drawback it may affect their future. When the
students
work or travel after schooling
then
they apply for their work or college admission. They already have an
experience
of something.
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example
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a few
foreigh
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inversities
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encourage their student to go
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kind of
activities
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or they select their
students
based on
this
experience
is
additional
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benifit
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of
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students
and it can
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to
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plan
thier
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future education or get some business plans. The major disadvantage of
this
approach, they can easily distract from their
studies
.
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,
students
easily get the
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but after that, they may face some problem to concentrate their
studies
because after a long break it is difficult to focus on their
studies
. In conclusion,
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talking
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a break is good because they can gain knowledge and get some
experience
. It will help their future plan. some of the
students
plan to study after the gap. They will put more concentrate
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their
studies
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