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Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extend do you agree?

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Many people hold the view that governments should invest more money
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 traffic facilities
such
 as roads or motorways than public transportations. From my perspective, I completely disagree with
this
 view for several following reasons. The
first
 reason for my belief lies
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 the fact that the public transport system can solve the causes of traffic jams.
This
 is because our world is facing overpopulation, which means more citizens use their private
transports
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 than before. The mentioned situation may lead to many citizens having some difficulties while commuting to workplaces on
time
.
Therefore
, public transports
such
 as buses or subways become the most suitable solution for
this
 issue.
For example
, according to many surveys, 80% of
workers
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reach their workplaces on
time
 by using buses.
In addition
 to the reason above, public
vehicles
 help
workers
 to save
time
 and money on commuting. A clear illustration
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this
 can be depicted through the fact that the cost of fuel, gasoline
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 instance, increases dramatically due to the lack of fossil fuels.
Moreover
, people have to spend more
time
traveling
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 to workplaces because of the extreme traffic jams.
Therefore
,
workers
 have a tendency to travel by public
vehicles
, which can have them commute at a very short
time
 with an appropriate fee.
This
 means they can save their budget to some extent.
For instance
, according to an article I have read before,
workers
 at suburban factories spend $50
for
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 public transport while others spend $100
for
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 their private
vehicles
.
Furthermore
, public
vehicles
 take 15 minutes to reach the factories while others spend 45 minutes commuting by their cars. In conclusion, my viewpoint does not lie with the fact that the government should spend more of its national budget on improving roads than
public
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vehicles
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Infrastructure
  • Transportation
  • Congestion
  • Economy
  • Carbon emissions
  • Pollution
  • Social inclusion
  • Urban development
  • Efficient
  • Investment
  • Reliance
  • Boosting
  • Affordable
  • Private vehicle users
  • Public transport system
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