Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extend do you agree?

Many people hold the view that governments should invest more money

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traffic facilities

such

as roads or motorways than public transportations. From my perspective, I completely disagree with

this

view for several following reasons. The

first

reason for my belief lies

with

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the fact that the public transport system can solve the causes of traffic jams.

This

is because our world is facing overpopulation, which means more citizens use their private

transports

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than before. The mentioned situation may lead to many citizens having some difficulties while commuting to workplaces on

time

Therefore

, public transports

such

as buses or subways become the most suitable solution for

this

issue.

For example

, according to many surveys, 80% of

workers

who

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reach their workplaces on

time

by using buses.

In addition

to the reason above, public

vehicles

help

workers

to save

time

and money on commuting. A clear illustration

for

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this

can be depicted through the fact that the cost of fuel, gasoline

for

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instance, increases dramatically due to the lack of fossil fuels.

Moreover

, people have to spend more

time

traveling

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to workplaces because of the extreme traffic jams.

Therefore

workers

have a tendency to travel by public

vehicles

, which can have them commute at a very short

time

with an appropriate fee.

This

means they can save their budget to some extent.

For instance

, according to an article I have read before,

workers

at suburban factories spend $50

for

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public transport while others spend $100

for

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their private

vehicles

Furthermore

, public

vehicles

take 15 minutes to reach the factories while others spend 45 minutes commuting by their cars. In conclusion, my viewpoint does not lie with the fact that the government should spend more of its national budget on improving roads than

public

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on public

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vehicles

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Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extend do you agree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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