Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extend do you agree?

Many people hold the view that governments should invest more money
on
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traffic facilities
such
as roads or motorways than public transportations. From my perspective, I completely disagree with
this
view for several following reasons. The
first
reason for my belief lies
with
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the fact that the public transport system can solve the causes of traffic jams.
This
is because our world is facing overpopulation, which means more citizens use their private
transports
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than before. The mentioned situation may lead to many citizens having some difficulties while commuting to workplaces on
time
.
Therefore
, public transports
such
as buses or subways become the most suitable solution for
this
issue.
For example
, according to many surveys, 80% of
workers
who
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reach their workplaces on
time
by using buses.
In addition
to the reason above, public
vehicles
help
workers
to save
time
and money on commuting. A clear illustration
for
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this
can be depicted through the fact that the cost of fuel, gasoline
for
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instance, increases dramatically due to the lack of fossil fuels.
Moreover
, people have to spend more
time
traveling
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to workplaces because of the extreme traffic jams.
Therefore
,
workers
have a tendency to travel by public
vehicles
, which can have them commute at a very short
time
with an appropriate fee.
This
means they can save their budget to some extent.
For instance
, according to an article I have read before,
workers
at suburban factories spend $50
for
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public transport while others spend $100
for
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their private
vehicles
.
Furthermore
, public
vehicles
take 15 minutes to reach the factories while others spend 45 minutes commuting by their cars. In conclusion, my viewpoint does not lie with the fact that the government should spend more of its national budget on improving roads than
public
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vehicles
.
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