Many doctors recommend that older people exercise regularly, but most patient do not follow an exercise routine. what do you think why this happens? how people can be encouraged to exercise regularly?

It is often advised by the clinicians to the elderly
people
to
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perform
exercises
on a routine basis but the majority of them fail to do so.
This
essay will discuss various reasons responsible for
this
and how
people
can be motivated to work out daily. Undoubtedly, exercise plays a pivotal role in maintaining a healthy lifestyle for every
age
group.
Although
, older
people
are more encouraged by the doctors for doing
exercises
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exercise

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,
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because most
of
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the ailments
such
as diabetes, high cholesterol and cardiac problems are
age- associated
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.
However
, many of them are unable to exercise regularly.
This
could be due to many reasons
such
as poor dexterity, joint and muscle pain and arthritis.
Therefore
,
apparently
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they feel more fatigue as compared to the younger generation.
In addition
to
this
ageing results in behaviour changes.
For instance
, many studies have proved that old
age
individuals are more stubborn as compared to middle or younger
age
group.
Hence
, they do not like to follow the recommendations, even if it is prescribed by the doctors for their own good.
However
, many measures can be taken by the governing bodies as well as the communities to inspire ageing
people
to perform
exercises
.
Firstly
, the government should consider building more public parks, walking pathways as well as sports centres for the senior citizens.
Secondly
, family and friends should
also
persuade elderly
people
to perform
exercises
by making them aware of its health benefits.
For instance
, in India mainly in the urban areas, in the living, societies
people
have started laughter clubs where not only the old
age
people
cherish but
also
exercise on a routine basis.
Therefore
, both the government and
people
should make efforts to teach aged individuals the value of working out. In the conclusion,
although
pertaining to old
age
and many health-related problems, individuals fail to follow
doctor's
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doctors'

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recommendations on routine
exercises
. But with combined efforts of the government and
people
as well as medical professionals
this
problem can be resolved and the elderly can be guided to do
exercises
to maintain a healthy life.
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