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Online courses have been welcomed as a great opportunity by many students, other students see these courses as a poor substitute for classroom teaching. What are the advantages and disadvantages of studying an online course?

#courses #opportunity #students #substitute #classroom #course
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 for students that widen the scope of learning through online courses, but several students saw
this
 as a negative replacement for face-to-face learning. In my opinion, there are some advantages of
this
 method, mainly is the huge possibility of
time
 management for working students, meanwhile, for
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 it can be social skills are lessen. The most significant advantage of online classes is that a
student
 can manage his
time
.
This
 means to say that the pupil can choose the school's website which schedule he can work on.
In addition
, if the
student
 is currently working, and he wants to study, he could have a tremendous chance to make it possible because most of the online
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 are designed
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 working
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.
For example
, I am presently working as a nurse and having a full-
time
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online
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 course is so effective for me because I can stretch my
time
 for my job and school.
On the other hand
, there are
also
 several disadvantages of online classes. One is the limitation of social skills,
such
 as team building, friendship
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 classmates, and face-to-face conversation. Due to limited interaction,
this
 could lead to
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 introvert person where
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 person will be alouf to have
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conversation
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such
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 of feelings.
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, a survey was made in Victorian Newspaper about how
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 felt if they study in a small room without physical
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, 90% of the respondent resulted
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 can lead to introversion. In conclusion,
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online schooling for
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 the
student
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 potential introversion of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-discipline
  • virtual classroom
  • digital literacy
  • e-learning
  • asynchronous/synchronous learning
  • courseware
  • webinar
  • interactive
  • multimedia resources
  • accreditation
  • digital divide
  • pedagogy
  • curriculum
  • MOOC (Massive Open Online Course)
  • blended learning
  • cognitive load
  • peer collaboration
  • learning management system (LMS)
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