Online courses have been welcomed as a great opportunity by many students, other students see these courses as a poor substitute for classroom teaching. What are the advantages and disadvantages of studying an online course?

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world gave the nation a better opportunity
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for students that widen the scope of learning through online courses, but several students saw
this
as a negative replacement for face-to-face learning. In my opinion, there are some advantages of
this
method, mainly is the huge possibility of
time
management for working students, meanwhile, for
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it can be social skills are lessen. The most significant advantage of online classes is that a
student
can manage his
time
.
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means to say that the pupil can choose the school's website which schedule he can work on.
In addition
, if the
student
is currently working, and he wants to study, he could have a tremendous chance to make it possible because most of the online
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are designed
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, I am presently working as a nurse and having a full-
time
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online
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course is so effective for me because I can stretch my
time
for my job and school.
On the other hand
, there are
also
several disadvantages of online classes. One is the limitation of social skills,
such
as team building, friendship
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classmates, and face-to-face conversation. Due to limited interaction,
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could lead to
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introvert person where
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person will be alouf to have
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of feelings.
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felt if they study in a small room without physical
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, 90% of the respondent resulted
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and
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can lead to introversion. In conclusion,
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essay
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apply

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online schooling for
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which
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the
student
has the
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management, and for disadvantage is
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potential introversion of
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