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Some people think that the news media has become much more influential in people’s lives today and it is a negative development. Do you agree or disagree?

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The map details alterations to a park in 1980 and the present day. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the park has become more developed for visitors with additional recreational space for outdoor eating, seating, and playing. The only subtraction relates to the flowers. In 1980, there was a single entrance on the left side above a pond surrounded by 3 benches. Now, the gate has disappeared, the road is less straight and the pond has more benches around it. There are
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 two additional roads coming from the top and right of the diagram, sectioning off an area with trees, chairs, desks, and barbecue options (previously only containing trees). In the bottom right corner of the map, a flowerbed has been replaced by a playground. A
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 space for flowers in the bottom left below the pond has
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