Many parents are unhappy with their children playing violent games and watching violent movies. How it can effect children and what can be done to solve this problem

Overindulgence of adolescent in violent
games
and
movies
have become the most concerning issue among
parents
. It can badly affect
children
's psychology and make them aggressive in daily life.
Parents
need to focus a lot on their
children
's activities to solve
this
concern. Video
games
or
movies
with violent content harms
child
's behaviour. While watching
such
content a
child
becomes more rude and aggressive in nature as a younger generation's grasping power is high. So whatever they watch becomes their reality.
For instance
, watching action
movies
and playing fighting
games
motivates a
child
to act the same in real life as well, so fighting with friends, and kicking each other in the school
has
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become a common complaint.
This
proves that negative learnings always affect
children
's behaviour and spoil their childhood as well. Guardians need to put in a lot of effort and involve themselves with their
children
to cure
this
issue.
Parents
must encourage their
children
to play in outdoor activities or take them to parks on daily basis.
This
will help a
child
to get a break from online
games
or
movies
and
also
improves their physical and mental health.
Moreover
,
parents
should keep a close eye on their kid's schedules and shouldn't allow them to use the internet, or mobile phones during their absence.
Lastly
, a parent should guide their adolescent to watch the content of their age and have good learning. As a
child
can learn things effectively in their adolescence. To conclude, watching action or violent
movies
and playing violent
games
pollute
child
minds and ruin their behaviour and childhood.
Parents
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efforts can solve
this
concern by managing their
child
's daily activity and by giving quality time to the kid.
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