Education is not a luxury, but a basic human right and as such should be free for everyone irrespective of personal wealth. Do you agree or disagree?

Education
has been redeemed as the pathway to success.
Education
has provided us with various opportunities,
hence
improveing
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improving
quality
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the quality
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of each individual as well. I'm convinced that the
government
should provide subsidy
education
and provide affordable regardless of wealth or social status. Not only
this
method have created equality among its
population
, but it
also
improves
quality
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the quality
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of the
population
as well.
Firstly
, we have known that in order to practice in a high paying carrier, each individual needs to have
high
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level of
education
,
in addition
, cause a massive amount of fortunes.
For
example
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law and
doctor
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degrees in many countries
,
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requires each individual to complete
two
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stage
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stages
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of
education
(secondary and graduate programs).
This
process
don't
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just cost
great
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deal of time but
also
wealth as well.
As a result
, eliminate any
low income
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earner from
competition
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the competition
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.
However
, governments can prevent
this
by making
education
free and accessible to everyone.
This
is why providing free and affordable
education
help lower inequality in
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society.
Secondly
,
many
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informations
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have shown us ,that most
of
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the
development
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countries
contains
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high numbers of
education
population
.
For instance
,
educated
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an educated
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population
will provide necessary skill
labor
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for
government
uses
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.
In addition
, an
education
population
guarantees a decrease in unemployment,
thus
improving the
quality
of the
population
in the country.
Therefore
the
government
should provide free
education
to as much of the
population
as possible. In conclusion, free
education
helps each
government
improve
quality
and equality in its
population
.
As a result
,having free
education
was
a
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important task the
government
should provide for
it's
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population
. The
government
should
starts
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by providing financial support for
low income
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low-income
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earners or
decrease
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decreasing
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the
education
fees.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental right
  • accessible
  • social mobility
  • personal and professional development
  • overall development
  • equality
  • social disparities
  • access
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