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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
No doubt the news and all
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interesting
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 subject around the world is a global interest, so the question around
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 of paper anymore? I partially agree with
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in
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To begin
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 our
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 and everything around the world we can know about
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 by picture and sound
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 the same time. As well as the life is so fast so the track of that increased gradually beside technology, which is the language of the current generation. from
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 side I believe just with your phone we can read and notice everyone happened in the same and you don't need to buy a newspaper to read about it, and more costly so more
befitial
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beneficial
 for long-term
such
 as more easily to find the information.
secondly
 to be the individual more active with the event around to keep up with
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every thing
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 new and changeable.
Finally
, make the process of getting
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information
more
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easier than
in
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the
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previously
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On the other hand
, some
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no
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 access to the internet, so that will be more difficult to depend on
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technology
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 find the news, so still need the paper
such
 as
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 or books to share it with rural areas.
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, there are
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group
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 of people
don't
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 like to read the news
form
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the
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 tablet or any device so they will keep their opinions about that
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old school mindset.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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