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The plans below show a student accomodation buildings 2010 and now.

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The plans illustrate the changes
of
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 a student accommodation building
during
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a
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 course of 12 years between 2010 and 2022. Overall, the plan has not
underwent
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 significant changes, and the most notable change is the car park that has been built to the south of the building.
Also
to
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the
north-west
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northwest
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 of the
garden
 has decreased in terms of size. In 2010, the building had a living
room
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 the north side, while to the north of the building was a part of
garden
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. By 2022, a section named student-bedroom has been built,
moreover
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 the living
room
 has converted
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toa
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 student-bedroom in a part that used to be a
garden
, so the
garden
 to the north side is a straight line now. Another change that can be seen in the plan of the building is that the kitchen is used not only as a kitchen but
also
 as a social area. The hallway size has diminished
,
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 because a
room
 called
En-suite
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an En-suite
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room
 has been built. The entrance has remained, while
garden
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the garden
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 that used to be located to the south of the building has
replaced
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 with a car parking.
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