Many parents are buying too many toys for their children. To what extend is this positive or negative for children?
Having too many
toys
can give a great sense of inner satisfaction to a child. On this
account, a number of children
are being provided with a plethora of toys
. From my point of view, it has had more practical effects on children
compared to those with less amused
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amusing
toys
.
On the positive side, having various kinds of toys
can improve creativity
. Needless to say that since some of them are designed to develop creativity
, buying them can be beneficial for a child. Boosting creativity
, toys
have made children
more ready when it is time for starting schools
, Fix the agreement mistake
school
for
instance
it has witnessed those Add the comma(s)
,instance
children
who have created shapes with Legos before going to school
have had better performance in lessons needed creativity
like painting at school
. Furthermore
, having a care-free
childhood by playing with Correct your spelling
carefree
toys
results in higher
Correct article usage
a higher
EQ
level. Higher levels of EQ
leads
to Correct subject-verb agreement
lead
better
understanding at Add an article
a better
school
. To illustrate this
, according to a recent poll those children
who tried a wide range of toys
, had higher EQ
level
, and 2 times faster in learning new tasks at Fix the agreement mistake
levels
school
.
On the other hand
, having too many playing items can results
in Change the verb form
result
children
with lack
of social skills. While taking Correct article usage
a lack
children
to park
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the park
playing
with peers can improve social Correct word choice
and playing
behaviors
, buying too Change the spelling
behaviours
much
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many
toys
makes them sit in a room being amused with toys
and getting Change the form of the verb
used
use
to loneliness Change the verb form
used
for
all day long Change preposition
apply
that is
why they become reluctant to meet new people, and having
too many Wrong verb form
have
toys
is not beneficial. For instance
, as we see children
who are usually far from toys
tend to go out more and play with real peers.
In conclusion, although
playing toys
can lead to low levels of interaction for a child, from my point of view occupying them with Change preposition
with toys
toys
is more efficient since it leads to higher EQ
level
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levels
,
and more Remove the comma
apply
creativity
both of which are necessary for better learning.Submitted by shahlad on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite