''It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?’'

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an early
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punishment
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is essential for
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to know the difference between right and wrong. In my opinion, I agree with the statement mentioned above because
punishment
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can assist the
children
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to value
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, and
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, parents and teachers ought to give knowledge
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good behaviour with some simple
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action
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.
Punishment
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is one of the most significant
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that can be done for
children
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to give them
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of their doings
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at a young
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is to say that a potential warning and provide enlightenment to kids that he did wrong and it can
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immediately because of their fresh mind.
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, I remembered during
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, as an Asian kid, my father used to call my attention
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the things that I have done. His normal
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if I did wrong was to hit me. I knew that back
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that he just want me to learn which one is best for me and until now I still remember those to not act that
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again.
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, parents and teachers might as well
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children
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a simple
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so that to have them realise the negative outcome of their
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action
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, if the
children
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not doing their homework and they are only watching television, for
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usually the parents will turn off the television and told them that they cannot watch until they finished their homework.
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for teachers,
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action
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of
punishment
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can be done
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as additional
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projects
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, surprise
examination
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examinations
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, and oral
recitation
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recitations
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. In conclusion,
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essay supports that
punishment
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should be provided at
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an early
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age
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because the
children
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can learn immediately the value of their
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action
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and similar to guardians that they can provide simple
punishment
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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