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Some parents but their children whatever they ask for , and allow their children to do whatever they want . Is this a good way to raise children ? What consequences could this type of parenting have for children as they grow older ?

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In
this
 day and age, a number of mothers and fathers allow their kids to do whatever they want and ask for. To my way of thinking, there are both pros and cons in equal measure to
this
 view. There is no shortage of reasons why, as far as I can see, there are benefits to
this
 initiative. In the
first
 place, it is good for children's self-development. They are not afraid of expressing themselves.
This
 means children are more likely to articulate their needs in different contexts.
For instance
, if parents buy a lot of toys, which are requested by their kids, it helps them how to think and behave. Playing a wide range of them develops their imagination and helps them to interact with others. Turning to the consequences of
this
 style of parenting, there are many disadvantages than advantages, if you ask me. For one thing, it can spoil our very young. They may get the idea that they can have all they want, whatever they want it.
This
 is not good for their social development. We need to learn from a very young age that
this
 is unrealistic. These young ones get greedy and selfish. They become impatient and likely to get angry with others inappropriately.
This
 will make things very difficult for them in later life. Teachers, employers and colleagues will not tolerate
such
 behaviour. With my reference to
this
, the way things are when it comes to
this
 issue in my country, China, is similar to the circumstances across the world over. My home city of Chengdu is a classic case in point. Here, kinds are more and more spoiled by their parents.
This
 creates behaviour problems in later life. The long and short of it is that there are positives and negatives to all choices we make, both as individuals and as a society.
This
 issue is no different to any other in that respect.
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