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Formal examinations are the only effective way to assess a student's performance. Continual assessment such as coursework and projects is not a satisfactory way to do this. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is deemed that evaluating a student’s learning status must be through formal exams while various assignments can not be used for assessment. It
is disagreed
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 that there’s only one way to judge the learning capability. In
this
 essay, analyzing, including paper
scores
 providing obvious studying results and assigned works
also
 reflecting the learners’ comprehension of knowledge can prove
this
.
Firstly
,
scores
 can really provide visual and direct results for youngsters learning abilities.
For example
, in schools and at home, teachers and parents need to acknowledge whether the children are in good command of the knowledge and skills they have learned for a semester.
Thus
 a midterm exam or a final test would be the easiest and most effective path because the examination could be done in a very short time and tell about the
scores
 very quickly and directly. In
this
 case, the examination is really a useful and efficient tool
of
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 assessing the kids’ performance.
On the other hand
, assignments
such
 as papers and projects can
also
 reflect whether the students are delicate in learning and show what kind of knowledge need to be strengthened.
For instance
, the children are required to do some reviews every day. From the completion of their paperwork or some handmade items which are based on the information they learn, the adults can be in good command of the kids studying status and make a short-term schedule in order to help them with unfamiliar areas.
Therefore
, continuous working can
also
 serve as a satisfactory and quick tool to assess students’ performance in school. In conclusion, an examination can really be used for evaluating students in a more efficient, straight while the assignments every day could be
also
 served as a supporting method for the purpose of judging and improving within a short time.
Therefore
, the viewpoint that tests are the only approach for evaluation
is disagreed
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.
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 Students could not only be judged by visual
scores
.
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