Homelessness is increasing in many major cities around the world. What do you think are the main causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

Homelessness is a well-discussed
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recently. By rising the number of houseless people, individuals have got concerned about it.
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essay will explain two major facts of that and some solutions. Possibly, there would be imperative factors
such
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population
in
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with the past. More
population
leads to more
home
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needed
consequently
, the price of renting or buying become higher so most citizens cannot live in a
house
and they become homeless.
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can be seen
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India. Due to
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population
and price of
houses
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most Indians are living below the poverty level and
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vagrant
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. The other cause would be
addiction
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an addiction
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, the most average
of
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homeless people are
drug-addicts
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. If they were addicted they would leave their home, family, career and every essential needed in their life.
Consequently
, they cannot achieve those needed especially
their
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house
.
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in
Afghanistan
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the
addicts
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ranges are
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as houseless citizens so it shows that would be impossible for addicts to have a
house
.
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homelessness are really changeable in different regions but there are some
commons
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.
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for amount of
population
authorities should determine elements and control
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immigration,
finally
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citizens would find a suitable apartment or
house
with low prices.
On the other hand
, the government can determine suitable places or buildings for addicts or people who living below the poverty level and have job offers for them to achieve their needed at
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. In conclusion, in my view, homelessness is an imperative problem worldwide and the government or authorities would control that with superb solutions.
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