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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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Studies have shown that obesity is closely associated with the excessive consumption of
sugar
, a serious threat to healthy societies. To cope with the problem, some propose to raise the
price
 of sugary
products
 to make them less affordable to
people
. While
this
 measure might discourage some
people
 from purchasing these
products
, I think it could be problematic in many ways.
First
 of all, it is possible that higher
price
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 might deter some
people
 from buying them.
However
, these are usually poor
people
 struggling to make ends meet. Increasing the
price
 of
food
 and drinks will only make their conditions worse. Most of the
food
 that
contain
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high
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 level of
sugar
are
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is
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 cheap, which is
a
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 main reason why poor
people
 suffer disproportionately from obesity. A great many of them won’t be able to afford healthy alternatives and might be forced to purchase even
more
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unhealthier
food
such
 as junk
food
. For consumers who are less
price
-sensitive, a small increase in the
price
 of sugary
products
 won’t be sufficient to drive them away from the sweet pleasure. To achieve the goal of discouraging
people
 to buy
sugar
, the
price
 increase has to be high enough to make a difference.
However
,
this
 will affect a wide range of
products
 considering the prevalence of
sugar
 used in
food
 production, and the result will be
higher
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 cost of living. Another consideration is that consumers usually associate higher
price
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 with higher quality. For some
people
, the more expensive
sugar
 is, the more value it has, which clearly goes against the purpose of the policy. To discourage the consumption of
sugar
, it is crucial to inform the public about its health risks in a more straightforward manner. To conclude, I think making sugary
products
 more unaffordable will not contribute to a healthier society.
On the contrary
, it might lead to a series of societal problems as discussed above.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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